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This is my problem,
My burden to bear,
Searching for my Nirvana,
But it just isn’t there,

Don’t try to help,
You’d be wasting your time,
There’s nothing left to do now,
But poetry and rhyme,

My lust for pain,
My lust for blood,
This will be my undoing,
But for now it tastes so good,

Forsaken all my friends,
And my family, too,
They can’t help at all,
Their “love” is not true,

Carving poetry into my skin,
Red ink trickles down my arm,
:iconlegolas3-14:
Please tell me your opinion of these poems!

WARNING:These poems are very dark/depressed/emo
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:iconviperrawrs:
~ViperRawrs Mar 29, 2013  New member Hobbyist Writer
This is great
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:iconshadowsgirl9:
"Forsaken all my friends,
And my family, too,
They can’t help at all,
Their “love” is not true,"

love this poem. i can especially relate to the above lines
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:iconmurasaki-shitsuji:
~Murasaki-Shitsuji Jun 15, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Your poem's speak your thoughts. That's what makes them unique.
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:iconthemysteriouspoet:
~TheMysteriousPoet Dec 26, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
i like them.
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:iconpurplemadness501:
~purplemadness501 Dec 11, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Luv it :meow:
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:iconxzaviur:
~Xzaviur Jun 7, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Great job.
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:iconceaselesslove:
Wow... Though I'm not emo, I find myself conecting with the lines as I read!! Very visualizing and just fantastically written!! PLEASE KEEP WRITING MORE!!
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:iconisoya-star:
Wow, this is really good and it's so well written. I really like the last two lines for some reason, either way its awesome!
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:iconthanks-for-the-emu:
very deep. i like the line "Forsaken all my friends,
And my family, too, They can’t help at all Their “love” is not true," very good work. you're a better poet then i'll ever be.
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:iconlegolas3-14:
Well, I'd die either way, so okay, thanks.
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